so overall the plot (what i could tell of it anyways) is pretty good so far, i would change the description to describe the story, the characters are really interesting and pretty easy to tell apart. however, i found it really hard to figure out who was who, how old people were, and overall even whether they were good or bad. the plot seems like it will turn out pretty well, but i think that you should establish it soon. the timing does seem a little bit rushed, like maybe you should make exchanges a little longer or go into more detail about important scenes that might be talked about later and how characters look, you cant expect people remember everyones age and how they look throughout the entire book. i would probably make more images to describe the characters if you're going to keep that, and maybe give more detailed descriptions about why characters hate each other and ppls personalities. finally, i think that maybe you should have an average word count for your chapters that you try to stay near (for example 500 wpc, and as you get better you could make it larger). Overall though, the writing was really good for a first book and all of the suggestions i've made are just things that i'd do. no pressure!
