KeyStorm
Finished reading your story. Few notes of constructive criticism. 1 I don't understand what is going on at all. I highly recommend revisions to make the story understandable. You could have a truly remarkable story on your hands it just needs a few touches. 2 Your MC's introduction seemed a little confusing. From what I've gathered things were going on pre-chapter 1. I suggest making a note of your timeline. Because it seems random. Not to bash I truly want your story to be the best it can be. So like palpitine I will be watching your story with great interest.
