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Unnie can you give me opinion and support.
          For the first time I wrote a story.
          Please give me suggestions how to improve it  
          I uploaded 2 parts 
          Can say it how is it my story  and love you unnie 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/391991472?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=Mafiaboss01809970

Hi