@NishaG hey I saw an read your story, it's really great. I forgot to reply after I read it. My biggest advice is, update! ;) But have the guy (totally spacing on names) make the girl forget all her sorrows when she's with him or something truly special. And I think you might be starting to loose your character, it happens a lot in a lot of stories so remember who she is and keep her in that light! That's all. I'd love feedback also if you wouldn't mind. Thanks!