Hi guys, I need opinions, thoughts, or advice on original story idea loglines! A longline is a brief one-sentence summary description of a story, movie, TV show, etc. PLEASE help and let me know what you think, if they're good or if the wording needs to be changed. This is the only way I'll know how good they are. Thanks in advance!
The Crown and the Captive: A Tale of Kings, Love, and Betrayal
Logline: In two separate kingdoms where a good and evil king continuously sieges for the rightful throne, a young woman and her older brother seek the truth about her parent's death while she debates friendship and love with a long-lost friend, but when she’s captured, another war erupts to hopefully stop the powerful madness.
Forbidden Love
Logline: A twenty-one-year-old woman and a young college Professor become intimately infatuated while in the same class, and each struggle with the pros and cons of a romantic entanglement between a Professor and a student along with secrets, betrayal, and exposure.
Trapped Beneath
Logline: When a teenage girl is suddenly kidnapped and taken hostage in an underground bunker by a creepy stalker who turns out to be a serial killer, she continuously struggles to break free and stay alive before she becomes his next victim.