Andree270
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I’m going to begin with saying I’m sorry for sticking my two cents into the already awesome story you have been writing. I’m not wanting to change anything but I have thought of something for possible use in the future for this story. It won’t hurt my feeling at all if you think other wise, nor, even respond to my brashness. Everyone wants Mogu to find his mate. Everyone wants Nie Chuyin to fall into nothingness painfully screaming. So a very basic outline is: Nie Chuyin loves furs. He has found a beautiful flawless furred immortal white female lioness that he wants to capture fatten up to make her bigger then kill her for her hide to make a coat or blanket. Mogu hears about the beautiful lioness and goes in search of her not knowing she is being hunted by a demon poacher. He then learns she has been trapped and apprehended by an evil demon hide poacher ( the two things he hates the worse a poacher and a demon). He must use his new found (two legged) immortal form to rescue her. Mogu also discovers Nie Chuyin is also the leader of the band of demon poachers that were sent to kill his family for their fur, that Donghua caught and killed then rescued baby, Mogu. Of course Mogu is able to rescues her and eats Nie Chuyin slowly starting at his feet & works his way up. Mogu then brings her home to meet Mistress and Donghua.