SpritePixie

My account is glitching out!! What is happening!!?

SpritePixie

Update: Revamping my account to be more up to date with my preferences, not going to be sorting out who I’m following till later so please don’t take it to heart if I’m unfollowing you, I just haven’t been on here in awhile…. Also reading list is being removed will create a new one which will be more up to date hopefully!

AlinaRomancier

Hello dear, I know that your time is valuable but could you please check out my story 'Reality Through A Library' and give your critique? Thank you for your time in reading this message.❤

SpritePixie

Hi! It’s no problem, I like the idea, it’s very interesting. The grammar isn’t that great but that’s excusable since you stated that English isn’t your first language and could be solved with a beta reader and or proof reading it if you hadn’t already. I think you explain things too much rather than show it, and a lot of the events in the first chapter happened rather suddenly and were over with too quickly, we barely know the protagonist so her thoughts in more depth would be appreciated as well. I like the interactions of the dishes and the protagonist, it was creative and it made me smile.
            I might read more later, but know I’ve only read chapter one and I’m quite tired right now so forgive me for not reading more before responding.
            I hope this was helpful, concept is good, keep writing!
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