Okay, so I just finished reading what you have so far, and I honestly have to say I'm really enjoying it. The storyline has me hooked already. I love how everyone has their own role, and I like that you're telling the story from different people's perspectives because it gives so much more depth to everything that's happening.
For this only being the beginning, I'm already invested. I'm really excited to see how things develop between her and Sadeek because I can definitely tell there's something there. I even caught myself getting a little jealous over the dude she's not even really going on a date with. That's how you know I'm already emotionally invested. I actually like the little age gap between them too, and I'm definitely rooting for them to end up together. I also love how mature she is for her age—it makes her character feel real.
Their conversation in his chapter was probably one of my favorite parts so far. It flowed naturally, had depth, and really made me want to keep reading to see where their relationship goes.
Overall, I think you're doing an amazing job. My only complaint is that there aren't more chapters for me to binge yet. Seriously though, I hope this helps. Please don't take the story down because I'm genuinely looking forward to seeing how everything unfolds. You've definitely got me invested.