ThatKidOverThere2

People of wattpad, rewrite this paragraph for me and make it GOOD:
          	   Ashton hesitantly stepped into the room, looking around until she noticed a guy leaning back in a chair in the desk at the back. He looked a bit older than Ashton, maybe early high school. He seemed very athletic with strong arms. He had sharp features and hair that was a mixture of chestnut and caramel colors. He wore an olive green t-shirt that matched his dark green eyes which boredly scanned over his phone screen in front of him.

ThatKidOverThere2

People of wattpad, rewrite this paragraph for me and make it GOOD:
             Ashton hesitantly stepped into the room, looking around until she noticed a guy leaning back in a chair in the desk at the back. He looked a bit older than Ashton, maybe early high school. He seemed very athletic with strong arms. He had sharp features and hair that was a mixture of chestnut and caramel colors. He wore an olive green t-shirt that matched his dark green eyes which boredly scanned over his phone screen in front of him.

ThatKidOverThere2

"Life nearly never goes as you expect it to. For example, Ashton fully expected her new school to have a door.
          	It did.
          	That is an example of a time where life did go as expected,  which is something you weren’t expecting. You were expecting an example of where life did not go as expected,  but instead life went a different way.
          	There’s your example of a situation where life didn’t go as you expected."

ThatKidOverThere2

a very confusing first few sentences  of an old story i wrote
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Arty_Arjay

I had to come here and say I loooove your PFP BTW!! :)

ThatKidOverThere2

@AdmirableNature thank you so much! i love yours too! :D
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ThatKidOverThere2

hoii and wElCoMe To My PrOfIle :D