@zarahthezombie
Heyy no problem! It was really well written and interesting! I couldn't stop reading haha :) umm for your story I guess you could add more description if you wanted to, like explaining with a little more detail of each location the characters are in so that the readers could get a better feel of the situation and picture it a little better, but that's just my opinion:) everything else is awesome so keep up the great work! Oh and never forget to edit and look over your work more than once because you never know what you may have missed (this helps me too) I love Hugo and Charlotte btw
