Amateur writer

Hey, Sup? 
          Hope you're doing good. I've been recently working on this story and it happens to be my first. It would really mean a lot if you please give a look at it. Promise I won't disappoint.
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/266067451?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=library&wp_uname=Itsferiha&wp_originator=fUdZGSLtQxePiR9vHF2m00SrUF%2F1AkTzFysZiXjCJtAOn%2F0O2XVUPBbwXXgme0sMmXuv%2BqIYHldj0smhQpFcfxcFm%2BdEj8bOxoFTgfSSqIQKHpS0ncFOXEd3CxlXNHDu