@ThomasWalborn
@sleepingdraco @joyceholt & our other weekend writer mommas; Happy Mother's Day.
@ThomasWalborn Thank you so much! And a late Happy Mother's day to Barbara! (I hope I remember her name correctly...)
I didn't understand the thumping his fists on the ground, causing the ground to shake. What am I missing? I'm not sure how I feel about this one. It started strong but I am not fully invested in the characters. You do great action scenes but I don't like a lot of the dialogue, it doesn't seem natural to me, so not sure if that's the issue for me. I used to have that problem. What I try to do now with my stories is read it aloud, even better if you can have someone else reading another character back at you.
@mediocrebrit thank you for your comments. I have started reworking the dialogue of the earlier chapters. As to the fist thumping, that was a nod to Jason Greenfield and the origin story for Johnny Earthquake. You were not missing something, i didnt link it well and probably should have never put it in there. I m thinking I will pull it back and rework it.
Chapter Fifteen of "Snapdragon" is now available. Johnny and Frank Crellin discover the warehouse where the high stakes poker games are held. Will they find answers? https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/333931057-snapdragon
Johnny's next stop is in Corpus Christi. Will he find who sabotaged the helicopter, resulting in the death of Lt. Dan Jenkins? You can find the next two chapters here: https://www.wattpad.com/1329108686-snapdragon-10-corpus-christi or read it from the beginning here: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/333931057-snapdragon
Tug Warner's death is confirmed as murder. Rusty stays undercover to infiltrate the poker game. Who is trying to stop them and what will they do next? The story continues: https://www.wattpad.com/1326019873-snapdragon-follow-the-money
Chapters 3 & 4 of the new Johnny Earthquake story, "Snapdragon", are now available. The stakes are higher as the search for the missing money becomes even more deadly.
I have just released Part 2 of Snapdragon You can find it here: https://www.wattpad.com/1314713801-snapdragon-earlier-that-week
I have just published the first part of a new Johnny Earthquake serial titled SNAPDRAGON. It is available here: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/333931057-snapdragon Johnny and Rusty have been hired to find a stash of counterfeit money that Noface has hidden, but someone will do anything to stop them. The action begins in the very first chapter. Please let me know what you think.
It is Thanksgiving day here in the US and I wanted to say Thank You to all of my Wattpad family for your support and encouragement over the years.
Thomas, I was wondering if you could Email me (see My Profile) about Christine and what happened. I'm so sorry to hear the news. We were good "friends" as she would say and checked on me when I stopped writing for a short time way back when. She encouraged me to start writing again. It makes me very sad. Jim
Just finished listening. Hearing a voice and placing a name to it, a name I've only known through words was fascinating. It must be a lot of work putting this podcast together with people in different places.
