ThomasWalborn

@sleepingdraco @joyceholt & our other weekend writer mommas; Happy Mother's Day.

ThomasWalborn

@ThomasWalborn Yes, you did. I'll pass that along.
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joyceholt

@ThomasWalborn Thank you so much! And a late Happy Mother's day to Barbara! (I hope I remember her name correctly...)
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sleepingdraco

@ThomasWalborn thank you!
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mediocrebrit

Hi Tom, hope all is well. Just to let you know, I think you'll find your helpful octopus is sadly a fake photo. But there is that amazing documentary, My Octopus Teacher, about the guy who became friends with an octopus; they are incredibly smart.

mediocrebrit

@ThomasWalborn That took you a while. My faith in the internet was shattered years ago. Well, at least Martians are real.
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ThomasWalborn

@mediocrebrit Nooooo. Say it ain't so.   My faith in the internet is shattered.
            It was still a nice story, even if it was a fantasy.
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ThomasWalborn

@sleepingdraco @joyceholt & our other weekend writer mommas; Happy Mother's Day.

ThomasWalborn

@ThomasWalborn Yes, you did. I'll pass that along.
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joyceholt

@ThomasWalborn Thank you so much! And a late Happy Mother's day to Barbara! (I hope I remember her name correctly...)
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sleepingdraco

@ThomasWalborn thank you!
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mediocrebrit

I didn't understand the thumping his fists on the ground, causing the ground to shake. What am I missing? I'm not sure how I feel about this one. It started strong but I am not fully invested in the characters. You do great action scenes but I don't like a lot of the dialogue, it doesn't seem natural to me, so not sure if that's the issue for me. I used to have that problem. What I try to do now with my stories is read it aloud, even better if you can have someone else reading another character back at you.

ThomasWalborn

@mediocrebrit thank you for your comments. I have started reworking the dialogue of the earlier chapters. 
            
            As to the fist thumping, that was a nod to Jason Greenfield and the origin story for Johnny Earthquake.  You were not missing something, i didnt link it well and probably should have never put it in there.  
            I m thinking I will pull it back and rework it.
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ThomasWalborn

I have just published the first part of a new Johnny Earthquake serial titled SNAPDRAGON. It is available here: https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/333931057-snapdragon
          
          Johnny and Rusty have been hired to find a stash of counterfeit money that Noface has hidden, but someone will do anything to stop them. The action begins in the very first chapter.  Please let me know what you think.