@syed251970 I guess it could be better.
Take this with a grain of salt, the plot wasn't giving like don't get me wrong the idea is there but it lack details, depth of the story, it was too fast-paced. yk.
just take their misunderstanding as an example, I deemed Lisa's reason to go thailand somewhat shallow. just because she saw them kissed be enough reason for her to go back to her country? ik she's hurt n all but just for a kiss? other scenes needs an improvement as well.
Please don't take this to heart, don't let this stop you from writing. Rather, take this as a constructive criticism to better improve your writing skills. Youre getting there, I think you just need to read other books or watch dramas as a reference to inspire you more with much creative ideas n all.
God bless you! n I'm hoping to read your future books someday! <3
