Unacorn2345

Hello am writing a new book, titled the ear archer 2 and I would love constructive criticism on how to be better please check it out.
          Thank you in advance
          Below is the linkhttps://www.wattpad.com/story/147660817?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=remembrace&wp_originator=4yoxSUm22jx0nFuITGj3D7AM6Omn%2FExXE7CKSBMVGQTV%2FYEFWbun76V1s6RkD%2B8%2FJ%2BKI9Hm5cEFbIqyoJj8r1tL12VldmHSh8vR68u3hy8357fBwQ3TWiGlfQEShGnyk