WearMyPainProudly

Hello all my awesome readers!  Just letting you know that I've been hard at work re-writing and editing The Raven & The Spider, but I was wondering if you all could answer a few questions for me about the book so I can better improve it. Here we go:
          	
          	1. If I decided to go with only one point-of-view during the book, which would you prefer? First-person (I did the thing), Second-person (You did the thing), or Third-person (She did the thing)?
          	2. Are there any specific chapters or parts of the story you absolutely DON'T want me to get rid of? Also, are there any chapters or parts of the story you absolutely DO want me to get rid of?
          	3. Are you into the sub-plots (Like the Noah's Ark Circus and the Guy Riots), or would you prefer if I just stayed on track with the main plot?
          	4. Would you prefer me to add more romance and "lovey-dovey" bits, or are you content with the amount I had previously put in?
          	5. Would you like me to put in some background music fitting in with every chapter?
          	6. Would you like Sebastian to play a more prominent role in this story, and if so, doing what?
          	7. Is there anything about (Y/N) you don't like or that you want me to change? What should her personality be like throughout the story?
          	8. Do you think I should make Elizabeth Midford part of the story unlike last time, or not? If yes, then what role do you think she should play?
          	
          	I think that's it. Let me know if you have any other ideas or preferences for the story and I'll be sure to do my best to add it in. Thanks so much for all your continued support and help! Peace out!

generalofloki5

@WearMyPainProudly 
          	  1) I feel like in this case 3rd person omniscient would work best as you could manipulate who your following and who's thoughts your hearing and you could include things that perhaps the main character didn't notice but could play a role in the future.
          	  2) I think the story is great the way it is
          	  3) I really like th guy riots and it was kind of left on a cliff hanger. Subplots are really interesting because while sometimes people ignore them and dismiss them as fillers or annoying, you can add important things that will help the main plot that you couldn't really add anywhere else.
          	  4) While romance is nice and all I can tell it's not your main focus in this book so, keep it the way it is. 
          	  5) while other people might enjoy it, I personally won't listen to it as I have music playing in my room a majority of the time anyway.
          	  6) Interactions between him and Y/n are at a low, And perhaps (since she is currently scared of him right now) you should keep it that way. But it would be nice if in the future something happens that has them talk to each other or Y/n sees something and realizes that he's not a scary person (Like watching him play with a cat in the garden)
          	  7) I like her the way she is
          	  8) It says that Ciel's previous fiance was murdered, and there seems to be more than the usual amount of beef between him and Alois. Maybe connect the two? Like Alois fell into an obsession surrounding Elizabeth but when she rejects him,  he's like 'if I can't have, her no-one can' kind of deal. (To be honest, that's actually what I thought had happened while I was reading the book. There weren't any direct clues but I may have connected dot's of a different picture and called it one)
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WearMyPainProudly

@Azucena2602 Sorry it took so long to respond! Thank you so much for the input! I really like your idea about Elizabeth and I'll be sure to incorporate Sebastian a bit more into the story. Your answers help me a lot, and I can't wait to show the completed story! Thanks again!
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Azucena2602

@WearMyPainProudly  
          	  1)  I'm fine with whatever you choose because your the author, but i wouln't mind if you did it the chapters in third person pov.
          	  2)  Everything in you your story so far is really good, i don't want anything to change.
          	  3) So far in your story I like how the main plot is,  because as it progresses it getting more and more interesting and to be honest it always has me at the edge of my seat.
          	  4) I  like the amount of romance is in the story, its not to much and not to little its just right. But i would like a bit more romance between ciel and the reader if you don't mind.
          	  5) I wouldn't mind some music as I read the story, it would give the story a more realistic movie feel. (does that even make sense?)
          	  6) I really would like Sebastian to be more interactive in the story like  having some conversation with the reader and let him do some butler things like how he does in the show.
          	  7) I love (Y/N) the way she is, because she's adventurous, brave, and going through problems that only she can solve. i like the character development in her i would change it for anything.
          	  8) yes i would like elizabeth to be apart of the story and her role would be that she cancel the engagement because she realize that she wants to be more independent about herself. And she knew that ciel didn't want to marry her and he only loves her like family so she lets him go and lets him chose his own path. And she and the reader would be good friends in this that way everyone can be happy. 
          	  i hope my answers help.
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SwordAndCinder

Please do not ever delete this. It's the best Black Butler fan fiction I've read.  I love your writing.
          I'm also a shy writer. I have completed manuscripts that I just hope I'll have the courage to send to a publisher some day.
          If you do get published, please tell us fellow wattpaders, I for one would buy it.  
          It would be cool if Yen Press allowed you to write Black Butler novelizations if they ever do any.  I hope they do. Some of my favorite books are novelizations of movies. 
          I sincerely hope your life calms down. No one said living was easy. I hope things get better so you can get back to doing the things you love. 
          And let's hope for a better 2021.

WearMyPainProudly

Hello all my awesome readers!  Just letting you know that I've been hard at work re-writing and editing The Raven & The Spider, but I was wondering if you all could answer a few questions for me about the book so I can better improve it. Here we go:
          
          1. If I decided to go with only one point-of-view during the book, which would you prefer? First-person (I did the thing), Second-person (You did the thing), or Third-person (She did the thing)?
          2. Are there any specific chapters or parts of the story you absolutely DON'T want me to get rid of? Also, are there any chapters or parts of the story you absolutely DO want me to get rid of?
          3. Are you into the sub-plots (Like the Noah's Ark Circus and the Guy Riots), or would you prefer if I just stayed on track with the main plot?
          4. Would you prefer me to add more romance and "lovey-dovey" bits, or are you content with the amount I had previously put in?
          5. Would you like me to put in some background music fitting in with every chapter?
          6. Would you like Sebastian to play a more prominent role in this story, and if so, doing what?
          7. Is there anything about (Y/N) you don't like or that you want me to change? What should her personality be like throughout the story?
          8. Do you think I should make Elizabeth Midford part of the story unlike last time, or not? If yes, then what role do you think she should play?
          
          I think that's it. Let me know if you have any other ideas or preferences for the story and I'll be sure to do my best to add it in. Thanks so much for all your continued support and help! Peace out!

generalofloki5

@WearMyPainProudly 
            1) I feel like in this case 3rd person omniscient would work best as you could manipulate who your following and who's thoughts your hearing and you could include things that perhaps the main character didn't notice but could play a role in the future.
            2) I think the story is great the way it is
            3) I really like th guy riots and it was kind of left on a cliff hanger. Subplots are really interesting because while sometimes people ignore them and dismiss them as fillers or annoying, you can add important things that will help the main plot that you couldn't really add anywhere else.
            4) While romance is nice and all I can tell it's not your main focus in this book so, keep it the way it is. 
            5) while other people might enjoy it, I personally won't listen to it as I have music playing in my room a majority of the time anyway.
            6) Interactions between him and Y/n are at a low, And perhaps (since she is currently scared of him right now) you should keep it that way. But it would be nice if in the future something happens that has them talk to each other or Y/n sees something and realizes that he's not a scary person (Like watching him play with a cat in the garden)
            7) I like her the way she is
            8) It says that Ciel's previous fiance was murdered, and there seems to be more than the usual amount of beef between him and Alois. Maybe connect the two? Like Alois fell into an obsession surrounding Elizabeth but when she rejects him,  he's like 'if I can't have, her no-one can' kind of deal. (To be honest, that's actually what I thought had happened while I was reading the book. There weren't any direct clues but I may have connected dot's of a different picture and called it one)
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WearMyPainProudly

@Azucena2602 Sorry it took so long to respond! Thank you so much for the input! I really like your idea about Elizabeth and I'll be sure to incorporate Sebastian a bit more into the story. Your answers help me a lot, and I can't wait to show the completed story! Thanks again!
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Azucena2602

@WearMyPainProudly  
            1)  I'm fine with whatever you choose because your the author, but i wouln't mind if you did it the chapters in third person pov.
            2)  Everything in you your story so far is really good, i don't want anything to change.
            3) So far in your story I like how the main plot is,  because as it progresses it getting more and more interesting and to be honest it always has me at the edge of my seat.
            4) I  like the amount of romance is in the story, its not to much and not to little its just right. But i would like a bit more romance between ciel and the reader if you don't mind.
            5) I wouldn't mind some music as I read the story, it would give the story a more realistic movie feel. (does that even make sense?)
            6) I really would like Sebastian to be more interactive in the story like  having some conversation with the reader and let him do some butler things like how he does in the show.
            7) I love (Y/N) the way she is, because she's adventurous, brave, and going through problems that only she can solve. i like the character development in her i would change it for anything.
            8) yes i would like elizabeth to be apart of the story and her role would be that she cancel the engagement because she realize that she wants to be more independent about herself. And she knew that ciel didn't want to marry her and he only loves her like family so she lets him go and lets him chose his own path. And she and the reader would be good friends in this that way everyone can be happy. 
            i hope my answers help.
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Just_A_Valentine

Okay so... All I really have to say is... Well... I think that you're an amazing writer... I hope I get to b as good as a writer as you are... And I hope you get to be writer one day like how you want to... Also... T-thanks for reading my comment... ^//-//^

WearMyPainProudly

Yeah, I'm definitely planning on reading more of your stories! And sure, I'll put it on my to-do-list to give you a shout out in the postscript at the end of my book, as long as you don't mind waiting. That's where I'm planning to thank and acknowledge those who especially went out of their way to inspire me and my story. I'm so glad that you left this message by the way! It really is such an amazing encouragement to receive appreciation for something I poured my heart into. But promise me you'll remember one thing: you don't have to shake the world in order to make an impact. Thanks again!
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Just_A_Valentine

Y-You would be willing to... To read some of my works...? T-thank you so much! I really appreciate that! Truly, I'm very grateful! Also... Everyone has a ways to go... We all learn and get farther... But i know you're way ahead of me and i cant wait to get to the same level of writing as you! Also... I have a favor to ask... I-if you'd accept it... Would y-you... Well... I sometimes have trouble with my writings and such and... I ask some of my readers for help but I never get it... And since i dont really have alot of reads... Well... I obviously wouldnt get help... I would like more people to read my stories and... Have some of my readers help me that way they can have sothing they like in my story and maybe even add them as some sort of character in it if they would like... So... What I'm asking of you... Is if you'd help me be known... As in... You know... Tell your readers about me... And suggest me for a story that they may like... But only do it if you think my stories would be worth while for them... And if youd be willing to do that... Then... Thank you... Whether you do it or not I will continue to thank you... For being my inspiration!
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WearMyPainProudly

Aww, thanks so much! I still have a lot to learn though, but hopefully I can achieve my ambitions in the future. I'll be sure to check out some of your writing this week and I know for certain that you'll get even better if you just keep that little light of inspiration inside of you and use it to the best of your abilities. Stay extraordinary! 
                 -Kylie <3
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Black_Rose_Girl_88

Hey gal how are ya?

WearMyPainProudly

Wow, that is a lot! Sorry, but my mom says that we have to go to some dinner party now to meet new neighbors. I'll talk to you later, Presh! Peace out!
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Black_Rose_Girl_88

Yep. I might seem weird but I actually counted more than 64 animes that I watch.
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WearMyPainProudly

Haha cool. And yeah, there are too many animes to choose from. So much anime, so little time... I already have a large list of things to watch next.
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