@WinterTracy
Hey how is it going. Not going to solicit anymore reads I promise hahaha. Just curious to know how u r? Hope everything is going great for you and yours. Hit me up for a chat if you ever get a chance. And if you ever do come to the UK let me know. We should definitely meet up for a coffee somewhere. All three of us u me and urja. It will be a full circle moment I think atleast for me.
hello,
it been a long time, I pray u r well and still out there taking enjoying life.
i thought i wouldn't bother you again until i think i was ready. I don't know if u remember but u told me a long time ago, when we were on booksie that you wanted to see how i wrote when i was over thirty, because u thought my writing would evolve and change by that time.
Well, not to make too fine a point, but i think you were right.
I want to invite you to read REDEMPTION, i have seven chapters up, but the story has really resonated with me for some reason. I started it as an experiment and now i find it has consumed me. If u're still there i need your expert advice, i need someone to tell me i am going down the right road. I thought it would be fun writing about a trans heroine, i thought i would make it a nice romance romp, with happy endings and rainbows, but it is turning out different from what i imagined. You know me, my writing is organic, i let the characters dictate what and how i write, and with this book i think i have come full circle. The more research i do into these issues the more invested i become. I have never written anything like this before, and i need ppl like you by my side for this next chapter of my evolution.
o.k here goes...just started working on chapter 1 and edited a boat load of stuff out and added things in, and guess what i agree with most of what you pointed out, words like walked, talked, and the rest of their ilk can be removed, one just needs to think about it a little and not be so lazy, which i am afraid i was.....but i am coming to realise that excuses just dont cut it anymore, i know i am busy but then so is every one else, i need to improve already, or this pipe dream will remain just that, a pipe dream, its time i got my behind into gear and really applied myself, and prove to everyone out there but mostly to myself that i can and will do this....did that sound too much like a rant, hmmmmm i guess so lol....btw i will send u the redone chapter via email if you want, so we can dissect it further, but only if u r up to it, i know romance isnt your cup of tea, oh and feel free to say no if you feel like it....as for your critique's regarding the other chapters, rest assured i am taking everything in, and processing it, i ten to peculate for a bit before applying changes, i am still evolving as a writer, and i am glad i have friends like you to point out the flaws, best to break bad habits early i think:-)
P.S u know i feel kinda weird wondering what u must think reading all this overly cliche, gag ridden fluff that i tend to write, i don't want to disappoint, but unfortunately these stories, silly though they are are what i can write so far, i did make a start on a few other stories, but i couldn't get too far, i have ideas but i cant execute them yet not with the weapons i currently wield, i need to take it to the next level somehow, u know me better than anyone as far as my writing goes, what do you think, have i grown or not? be honest, its time i got a reality check:-)
do they delete postings?? where did your mssgs to me go? Do you realize that I write erotica? Remember? So I do enjoy romance - and romantic writing - it just takes me a few paragraphs to catch onto your genre. I love reading what you write. You should never rush yourself, it happens when it's meant to (you would fall over laughing so hard if you read what I wrote when I was your age). Have you grown? Yes, in that you have found what you love to do and are sharing it. As long as it is supposed to be overly cliche, then I can read knowing that. As for reality check, be gentle on yourself, my gosh, it takes a long time to write and the worst thing you can do is be harsh. As for my critiques, just use what resonates for you. k !? I will read more!
Sorry for not replying to all ure amazing constructive comments yet, please don't think I didn't bother, but tommorow is my first Sunday off in two weeks and I plan to catch up with u guys then, also I found ure comments very enlightening, I always ask ppl to tell me about what they honestly think, but most just write me an ''update please'' so I am happy u took the time to really dissect my work, u made me realise that there is still a long way to go, ull be happy to know I am slowly writing a second draft as well and I am keeping ure advice in mind, u know I kinda feel sorry for making u read all this romantic stuff, I know it isn't ure thing, and that makes u reading this stuff simply because you want to help me out very selfless, thank you:-)
Oh and ure right about the watered down narrative at least compared to my previous work, but that was a conscious decision in the first few chapters I tried to cater to a niche there I am afraid and I am guilty of that but I stopped doing that later on, I just never really had the time to go back and rework the niggles I know are there, but I will don't you worry, I have two other novels up and they show a little more of my old self so to say, well actually just a few chapters as I am planning to pitch those to publishers at some point and I was told not to put my manuscripts online which is a bummer but there you go, no pain no gain.....with a Christmas wish I am aiming to finish it as and when I get time and then start extensively editing the first draft to polish it as much as possible, get myself some beta's and an edited and the. Self publish, yea I know still a long way to go yet but I am hoping I will get there.....oh and don't worry about kindness, u can be honest with me trust me I can take it, I know the first few chapters are rough and I often feel like that myself but it gets smoother as u go along, at least I hope it does:-)
Matt, if you want me to be super critical, I can be. If you want me to be a reader, I can do that too. This is your game, you let me know. Completely believe in you
Aaaaahhhhh so glad u made it to the dark side lol, I missed u and I am happy ure here, don't forget to add ure poetry here, if u want a reader base larger than booksie than this is it, oh and don't worry not all readers r teens I can point u in the direction of some very mature ones, several published and they give very good constructive criticism if u wud like that...I have a feeling ull be very very popular here if u r interested in that sort of thing lol....oh and I lived the constructive criticism, I needed it and I can totally see what ure saying, I will be working on the first chapter especially to bring it up to scratch, it needs work:-)
Don't worry about that just tell me what u feel honestly, I am nearing the end here and I will be working on this draft anyway, I will tell u what since I know romance is not ure stuff anyway how about reading chapters 29 through 39 and telling me what u feel, I matured more I think in the later chapters and learned to let go of some bad habits, but don't expect miracles, this isn't some literary masterpiece its fluff I am afraid, quite commercial but I like writing this sorta stuff, it feels natural....I think u would like the sample chapters of my other two novels better, I wud luv u to have a look and let me know what u think:-)
Well that is a shame, but u know you could add a few poems and make it private so only your fans read it, and there is a competition coming up, trust me wattpad needs great writers like u, there is a dearth of mature readers, and constructive criticism is a little hard to come by, u could help a lot of people peachy....there is a published author on here, several intact but most stay to themselves, but this lady cytolene check her out if u have the time, spends quite a lot of time offering help to newbies and amateurs like me, and it really helps hone ones craft, I feel u would find many like minded ppl on here, but of course the choice is yours a d k totally understand and support u in whatever decision u do make, best of luck