blah :(
Thanks for the comment. I'm glad for your honesty. Makes me frustrated though. You're kind of the type of reader I want for my work, since it's obvious you want something more serious and that's what I'm trying to offer. The fact that you think the second chapter comes off as teen fiction is like a stab to my heart. Teen fiction makes me want to die a little inside....
I'm currently working with my 'editor' on the second chapter, because I DO want to cut it down. I know she comes off whining and that's not the message i'm trying to get across. I have trouble chipping away at stuff myself though, so i often need a second pair of eyes to tell me what is necessary and what isn't
thanks for your opinion anyway though. It will at least help me in the future, and your comment was definitely not fake which is greatly appreciated. I was hoping to catch you with it but it seems I turned you away instead : <<<