@it-me-abby hi!!just making sure u cuz u didn't say anything in a while so The story is great but a suggestion? Sorta slow down the story cuz it all sorta happened real fast u know adoption then taking him as her father then the really heated moments are all too close together perhaps... he comes for the adoption then a week later she can go home with him , then maybe a few months later by accident she calls him dad then perhaps on her birthday the twins take her shopping then she's trying something on and he walks in on her then like a year later she learns he's a devil. So ya lemme know what you think abby bye