ad44656

I have published my first chapter of my first story. This is the first one I've ever published, I would love feedback, please. I know it might be a little rough, it's all freewriting with a little editing, not much. I'm open to pointers, tips, comments, anything. Thank you.

ad44656

I have published my first chapter of my first story. This is the first one I've ever published, I would love feedback, please. I know it might be a little rough, it's all freewriting with a little editing, not much. I'm open to pointers, tips, comments, anything. Thank you.