@alfie_c
I'm still here. I'm sorry for letting my audience hanging. I've been involved with some activism lately and it's put me behind on my writing.
I promise, these next 2 chapters are probably the longest chapters I've written. I'm hoping to drop the next chapter later today or tomorrow. Stay tuned, and I love you all for sticking around with my adventure.
Sorry for the delays in writing. I have lots of things going on. I dropped all the drafts I had and am still working on the last 2 chapters. I appreciate your patience. I'll drop the next chapter as soon as it's done and proofread.
Just finished writing a very emotional chapter. I have 2 more chapters to conclude the first part of Misfits and Wildflowers series. After that, I will take a small break to read some of my followers work and show them the same support I've been receiving. I love all your beautiful faces.
Part 2 is already planned and will be called "Fated?" This part of the series will have very intimate scenes and romance, but carry on the same vibes and antics as the first part.
I’m still reading, but just on first impressions of your story from the first chapter I think it’s a very cute and unique idea. The first chapter is what will grab your audience on here or anywhere else really. I think you have a great story idea, especially since it’s a true story.
For the first chapter, I think the first half of it could use a bit more elaboration. Possibly a story of what your friends and you did or about your sister punching the other kid bigger than her and then you being scared of her. It may make the reader see what you’re saying about being the nerdy kid more and then in turn, make the view of your girl seeing you for who you are a bit stronger. It may make it flow a bit more. It isn’t bad though at all.
I never hear about the male point of view so to see this is very cool. I think it gives a totally different perspective than usual. The banter back and forth between you two is cute so far, and the retro throw back feel is a really cool vibe. I also like that you had that crush instantly, like she was meant to meet you in that moment. Very sweet. The only thing about this half is maybe elaboration on how boring things were before she came in. It’ll make you seeing her for the first time pop more in my opinion. That’s it about that though.
That’s my first impression review at least. Take my criticism with a grain of salt. You don’t have to follow my advice at all. I’m just telling you how the parts make me feel as I read them. Don’t change your story too much for people and certainly not for me. Write exactly what you want to write. I just wanted to give you feedback on flow of the story from my reader perspective. Can’t wait to read the rest and give an up to date review!
@Harv2189 I greatly appreciate this. And all criticism is welcome since it's my first and probably only novel. You are also the second person that said that about the POV. One of the girls at my work started reading it and she said it's refreshing reading in that POV that doesn't get shown often. Making this story pop and memorable is a goal. It's also raw and real making others resonate with similar experiences, especially to the targeted audience that are facing similar issues
I'm rethinking my strategy on how I post my story and decided to keep it as a continuous story until the moment Alfie starts dating.
I will have to switch that to a mature audience as the characters Matured as well
@fictionsandook thank you so much. I'm still in the process of writing. Once I take a break, I will return favors and check out your work
Hey everyone. I have finally completed posting all of Vol. 1 the Homecoming story today. I hope to submit this for the wattys, but I want to make sure it's worth it. I need feedback.
Also, I am excited to announce I will also be releasing the first chapter of Vol. 2: Y2K.
