amidst_a_mist

@TaintedRain Your welcome! I'm glad I could help, it's awesome that I can give tips to one of my fav stories on Wattpad :D
          	
          	I love that you decided that Brianne is judgemental at first, then becomes open-minded, it's a great character developement and the readers will definitely like her more later then! :P
          	
          	This reminds me, I'm going to re-read iaswaa (the first version) all over! Partly to compare it with the new one, and partly because I miss reading it :3 
          	
          	Anyway, so again, your welcome for my tips, I hope at least some of them actually are useful!

TaintedRain

@stardust_girl 
          
          one of your favorites? O: thaaaaanks <3
          
          haha yeah! it wasn't meant to be that way at first, but i went through this stage where i felt the need to make my main characters really, really, REALLY dramatic and hateful.  NO idea why that happened, but it turned out kind of like a soap opera.  eeww. c; yeah, i find her so much more likeable in the later chapterss.
          
          hahaha aw thanks (: i'm glad you liked it <3
          
          yeah, they were! :D thanks so much! <3

amidst_a_mist

@TaintedRain Your welcome! I'm glad I could help, it's awesome that I can give tips to one of my fav stories on Wattpad :D
          
          I love that you decided that Brianne is judgemental at first, then becomes open-minded, it's a great character developement and the readers will definitely like her more later then! :P
          
          This reminds me, I'm going to re-read iaswaa (the first version) all over! Partly to compare it with the new one, and partly because I miss reading it :3 
          
          Anyway, so again, your welcome for my tips, I hope at least some of them actually are useful!

TaintedRain

hey! (:
          
          thanks so much for your constructive comment on iaswaa!
          
          I said Kyla's last name there so that people knew what her last name was.  It was kind of like an introductory sort of thing.  I'll try and make it less awkward next time (: thanks for the tip.
          
          Haha thanks I love Dannon's name too c:
          
          Yeah, the whole book is basically her becoming less judgmental, more open to believing that stereotypes aren't always true.  It's her transforming into someone who doesn't look at someone and instantly assume that they're snobby, jerky, or whatever.  Believe it or not, she was SO MUCH worse in the original version. It was so darn painful to read.
          
          oh, I didn't even notice I did that!  Thanks for the heads up c:
          
          Oh, I forgot to put that she was afraid to hit a girl?  I must have completely spaced.  She was supposed to say something about that. . . . Oops. xD
          
          I described the science room in full detail because it's the classroom the characters are in a lot.  Most of all the other rooms.  (: but thanks for the tip.
          
          Again, thanks so much for your constructive criticism!  I really appreciate it <3