angryCrayons

So I’m submitting a story to the ONC, and this is my attempt at it. It’s set in the same universe as TNSF and Indra does have a cameo ;) Check it out if you’re interested. 
          	
          	It's called "Flirt With the Loser" and is about a guy who is dared to ask out a girl for a prank... and a girl who goes out with a guy to improve her resume. 
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/407666463-flirt-with-the-loser

diary_of_an_ambivert

Hello there! Sorry for dropping into your profile out of the blue. Would you mind checking out my new romance story? I’m a first-time writer, so I’d really appreciate any feedback. TIA <3
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/53763109-through-her-lens
          
          I will checkout your work as well. Let's help each other out!

diary_of_an_ambivert

@angryCrayons Honestly, I would love both, if you can guide me as an author it would be helpful too. <3
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angryCrayons

@diary_of_an_ambivert  Happy to! Do you want feedback as an author or just comments as a reader?
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Kimmyluvs

Hey! Just wanted to let you know I’ve finished your feedback request for ‘Thou Shalt Not Flirt’ (all 5 chapters). Apologies for the delay. I’ve sent the full detailed analysis to your Reddit DM. Thanks again for participating in the exchange. :)

angryCrayons

@kimaniluvs That's very kind! Thanks again!
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Kimmyluvs

@angryCrayons No critique necessary. This was simply me offering to support my fellow writers.
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angryCrayons

@kimaniluvs Thank you so much! I appreciate it! I read through your critique and it’s genuinely incredibly helpful. A lot of it touched on things I was already worried about that you confirmed/noticed (which means I definitely need to work a little more about it!) plus added insights that frankly I can’t notice as an author (clunky phrasing or logic) since I know my story and my characters so well (but I forget that readers don’t know it that well sometimes). Again, thanks for taking the time. 
            
            Now I don’t remember if this was just feedback or if I was supposed to critique you as well. Let me know your book and I’d be happy to return the favor!
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angryCrayons

So I’m submitting a story to the ONC, and this is my attempt at it. It’s set in the same universe as TNSF and Indra does have a cameo ;) Check it out if you’re interested. 
          
          It's called "Flirt With the Loser" and is about a guy who is dared to ask out a girl for a prank... and a girl who goes out with a guy to improve her resume. 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/407666463-flirt-with-the-loser

CelesteCoy834

Okay.  I need more.  I’m running off of your story.  Indra.  I love you but.  BUT PLEASE.  JUST HUG JARON.  HE NEEDS IT SO BAD

angryCrayons

@CelesteCoy834 Frr no better way to fall asleep /ᐠ - ˕ -マ ᶻ
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CelesteCoy834

@angryCrayons who doesn’t fall asleep better in someone else’s arms?   Cuz ik I do
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angryCrayons

@CelesteCoy834 LMAOO yes I think Jaron would sleep best in Indra's arms (◡ ‿ ◡ .)
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angryCrayons

HI GUYS.
          
          Happy Valentine’s! <3
          
          As promised, “Thou Shalt Not Flirt” is officially back. Fully edited and I’m gonna upload it weekly :D
          
          Chapter 4 onwards, everything shifts. Bigger consequences, new arcs, new characters. And a much stronger payoff. 
          
          It’s long (very long), messy, and so much worse (for Indra).
          
          See you next week.
          
          [Thou Shalt Not Flirt](https://www.wattpad.com/story/396512261-thou-shalt-not-flirt-bxb)