daydreamingscenarios

Hi, y'all!! I'll be posting two chapters this weekend, one on Saturday and one on Sunday. Love y'all and hope you like it !!! (it's about to heat up a bit ;)

daydreamingscenarios

Hello, all!! In light of recent events (my woosan fic getting taken down :/), I have decided to post a different story. I know I said I was going to try to do more Ateez fics, but I haven't had much motivation to write about them lately. The fic I just posted is a Seungbin primal play fic and the next part will be out in a week so stay tuned!! I'm really, really stoked for this story so I hope y'all like it too!! Also, the spring semester has officially started so I probably won't post as often for the next few months :(

CoerStayTiny

Hi, I just posted my first ever writing and I have no one to check if its good or bad. So if you don't mind pls check it and tell me how it is

daydreamingscenarios

@CoerStayTiny ofc, anytime!!
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CoerStayTiny

Omg this all makes sense, thank you <3
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daydreamingscenarios

@CoerStayTiny ok, I hope you find this useful !! <3
            
            Try not to start so abruptly. Maybe skip the time jump and start when Y/N is already a model. Then, you can just call back on why she wanted to be a model with something. Maybe like she's listening to a SKZ song to calm her nerves and she remembers that they're the reason why she's a model at all.
            The paragraphs flow better if thoughts are in italics in my opinion (it's not an actual grammar rule tho I don't think).
            Separate the dialogues of different people into their own paragraphs to avoid confusion about who's speaking.
            Also- and this is very tiny lol- but people on life support don't usually have the ability to dance. Maybe try "dancing like no one was watching" instead!
            I'd also avoid using any slang, though I know it can be hard especially if English isn't your first language. But phrases like "locked in" and "folded" are kind of distracting and take the reader out of the story. You could replace "locked in" with "steeled herself" and "folded" with "buckled under the pressure of her intense gaze". 
            All over it was a great story for your first time!! If you want to engage readers more, just maybe think about some of the stuff I mentioned above. Another thing that might help is going through after you've written something and adding more details like maybe a pre-interview ritual Y/N has or what clothes/hair/accessories everyone is wearing or even what Y/N thinks of the interviewer (are his questions good or repetitive or invasive? Are his clothes sleezy or sexy? Is he attractive? Young? Bald?). I do this all the time as it helps to make the story feel that much more real!!
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daydreamingscenarios

Also, I've just thought of this, but here's a little dictionary for some of the terms I use often for those outside the kpop fandom that still wish to partake in my stories!
          Dongsaeng - Korean word for younger sibling (genderless)
          Hyung - Korean term of endearment for younger men to call slightly older men ("big brother") (also a common kink within Korean mlm stories; can stand in place of 'daddy', 'sir', etc.)
          Oppa - Korean term of endearment for younger women to call slightly older men ("big brother") (also a common kink within Korean mlm stories; can stand in place of 'daddy', 'sir', etc.)
          Maknae - Korean term for the youngest of a group (genderless)
          Ahjussi - Korean term for 'old man'
          Ahjumma - Korean term for 'old woman'
          Jagiya/Jagi - Korean terms of endearment meaning 'honey', 'baby', or 'sweetheart'
          Yeobo - Korean term of endearment meaning 'honey' or 'sweetheart'
          Eonnie - Korean term of endearment for younger women to call slightly older women ("big sister")
          Noona - Korean term of endearment for younger men to call slightly older women ("big sister")
          Please let me know if I forgot anything :)