@ghetteybishfish
Sorry I deleted your "feedback" from chapter 1, at first I thought it was good but then you just start hating on me, I'm a new writer, and you're right, I just make a lot of mistakes, that's why I want feedback, but you can also just convey that normally instead of picking on me, I'll leave you alone now but I wanted to say sorry about deleting it.
today was great i read a 270,000 word fanfic instead of doing my homework and got attacked by my house keys
if you want me to review further i shall do so red in tooth and claw
@ghetteybishfish Hey!! Thanks a lot for the feedback and review. I'm a fairly new writer so it helped me a lot. And it was my first time writing first POV, present tense, so yeah, thanks again. As you told, I did have a lot of problems with scene description like the lab and scarlet sun, and I have corrected them. Have a nice day!
Hello, fellow human being, thank you for your partially helpful and partially interesting feedback on my work in progress. I do admit to having trouble when it comes to the three tenses, but right now I'm just focusing on getting my ideas out. Though, readers don't know my vision for this story, it definitely helped to know how it's being interpreted by a reader. Anyways, you should definitely keep doing what you're doing. I'd be very interested in seeing how a bitter, close-minded, or simply sensitive writer would respond to your critique.
(Please don't critique my thank you note btw )
Good day,
KTJ
Anyone whom I have critiqued tonight come at me I dare you