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I have got another short story! It's not my best but it's in progress :) Tell me what you think? It will help me improve, thanks x

Hi , I'm 14 years old and i love writing stories. I really want to know my down-sides and positives of my story writing , so if you could leave some feedback on my stories , that will be great! 
          Thanks a lot , 
          smileandwaveboys ;)