MochiSpaceMoose222
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OKAYOKAYOKAYOKAY. So hi!! Fellow Wattpad author here! (If you don't believe me, check out my account) Just wanted to drop in and say I'M LOVING YOUR HXH STORY. I'm so excited to see where it goes! I do have a few notes, though. Not hate. Mostly grammatical stuff, tone, pacing, that kind of stuff. I could tell you, but that'd be like... way too confusing. English is dumb and writing is SO HARD but I'm like... really good at it (I'm so humble). If you'd like, I could help with editing. I don't charge any fees because I genuinely love helping people and like... it's Wattpad. No one wants to pay for anything anyway. And I've also noticed a lot of repetition. Some is okay, but too much will do more harm then good for your story. Anyway, let me know what you think of my proposal. It's completely fine if you're not into it, I just saw SO MUCH POTENTIAL and I got excited.
MochiSpaceMoose222
I promise I’m not trying to go full unhinged writing goblin on your story...
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MochiSpaceMoose222
Gotcha! I did the same thing for my HxH stories and two others. One of my KNY covers I actually made myself and I LOVE it, but it was a pain in my rear to do, so that's not something I'd do again lol.
As for your decision about my offer, I do have a few little favors to ask of you IF you agree to it. Nothing huge, still no fees. All I ask is that you follow me back and give me a bit of credit saying that I did the editing. Again, nothing big.
It doesn't need to be a whole declaration, just a lil footnote like "Edited by MochiSpaceMoose222" or something along those lines.
Oh, and another thing I could maybe help you with is the development of your OC. I'm loving her a lot so far! Her sass makes me laugh. I could send you my HxH OC Profile if you want that kind of thing for her. Feel free to use it as a reference guide or whatever, if you want. The method you have right now with the whole picture situation is a little confusing for my brain to pick apart and I don't know if that's the same for your other readers, or if it's just me. NOT THAT IT'S BAD, BECAUSE IT'S REALLY NOT. It's just that in my opinion, I think it's important to understand a character's mind, otherwise we only get the physicality of them, which I think is kinda shallow. (idk if that's the right way of putting it. I'm trying my best here.) I've noticed people feel more for your character if you include a more personal, emotional side to them.
I'm a psychology geek.
If that seems like too much, I'd totally get it because it's pretty deep dope to try to write.
As for the fear factor of posting... I FEEL IT IN MY SOUL. That's definitely the hardest part about being a writer. I'm actually TERRYFIED of what people really think of my writing. But if you think about it, the scariest thing is clicking "Publish". Once that's done, it's over. And if people don't like what you write, they can suck your big toe. As long as YOU love it, that's what matters.
Thanks again for taking the time to chat! <3
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jazzzy_102
hello! thank you, i’ll consider it, your so kind. yeah it’s a story i had for a while, like a while, i just never had the courage to post it. decided it was time and i had nothjng else to do. writing is hard, especially when im so bad at spelling, lol. as for the cover, no i didn’t make it, wished i was that talented. I found it in Pinterest when i was browsing around for a cover.
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