kiwi_1220

can someone give me some good suggestions please!

I just did my first writing so please give me some feedback! Tell me the truth and I will continue if y'all like it. Thank You Darling!

I don't care if you on the run
          Baby as long as I'm next to you
          And if loving you is a crime
          Tell me why do I bring out
          The best in you
          I hear sirens while we make love
          Loud as hell but they don't know
          They're nowhere near us
          I will hold your heart and your gun
          I don't care if they come, noooo
          I know it's crazy but
          They can take me
          Now that I found the places that you take me
          Without you I got nothing lose
          - Beyoncé