I'm so, so sorry for the late review!!!!!!!
To start off, the grammar is impeccable. The storyline is attention grabbing too. You are missing some spacing in-between paragraphs. The reason for your lack of reads is because the title and cover are boring. Even though I'm not successful myself, there are things you can do to draw people in without even reading your stories. You need the writing on the cover to stand out, use light writing for dark backgrounds and such. (Never use neon, that's a bad idea.) Don't over use emojis in your bio and descriptions. At the same time do not use too many emojis. I recommend 1 emoji per 200 words. Your bio and pfp are important. Names that are easy to remember are useful, too.
Fyi, remember your story is your own. You have to have fun or it will be meaningless. It's unnecessary to change your story and views aren't very important. I hope this helps!
