Hi @maddison4856
I saw that there are a lot of run on sentences and punctuation errors throughout your story. I love the plot and just the whole aspect of it, sometimes it is hard to understand though because of the lack of punctuation. If it would be willing I would love to add those in, of course I would never change your writing, only the punctuation! Thank you so much for writing this and I’m such a big fan! Have a good day and get back to me if you can.