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Thank you so much for the feedback, you were very kind to read! ❤️ what do you suggest to improve? Could I insert more descriptions or sensations? I admit that the type of narration I chose doesn't help me much. I will definitely make changes as I go along, as I continue to write I hope to improve

@lttlilly i read the first few chapters 
            the buildup is nice
            however i think the details can be worked on a little bit otherwise good going 

@koomiva yeppie

@koomiva imma give it a chance then

@koomiva i have read like 4 books of the series 
            and i found it pretty alluring

*book

@meisweird- if you don't mind could you perhaps check out my boom

@PennyOsullivan if you don't mind could you perhaps check out my book