mikekalmbach

I was looking through the undiscovered fantasy adventure stories, and your description popped out at me.  I read quite a few stories last night, but yours was the first.  :-)  
          	
          	Your writing style was pretty good, so I thought I'd give some tips on how to improve the base story.  I mentor a lot of people, and am always looking for talented writers that I can help take to the next level.  Keep writing!

mikekalmbach

I was looking through the undiscovered fantasy adventure stories, and your description popped out at me.  I read quite a few stories last night, but yours was the first.  :-)  
          
          Your writing style was pretty good, so I thought I'd give some tips on how to improve the base story.  I mentor a lot of people, and am always looking for talented writers that I can help take to the next level.  Keep writing!