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@alleyneangel It's amazing!!!

@jjlove12  you can have mine if you want. :)
          -Fleur

@jjlove12 
          
          Eh no sorry. 

can you give me your email so i can send it to you???

Yeah sure @jjlove12 
          
          --Ava

Hey i made you a cover do ya still need one?

Sorry for the multiple msgs. My iPod is kinda jacked up. And if you aren't Irish, there are many places you can brush up on your slang!

So I checked out your story! It was really good, but the ONE thing you need is to convince me that.... Uhhhhhh.... Whatshername is Irish. I may be Italian but I was born in America and in order for it to be believable you'd need to incorporate a lot of compounds, Irish slang, an probably a litte bit of Gaelic. Oh! And as you saw above, make the two characters distinguishable from one another. The only time I realized the character change is when I saw their names. I felt like they had one personality. It's a lot for me to be able to say for three chapters, but I have a sense for these things. Otherwise, it was amazing! Keep writing,
          -Rachel

So I checked out your story! It was really good, but the ONE thing you need is to convince me that.... Uhhhhhh.... Whatshername is Irish. I may be Italian but I was born in America and in order for it to be believable you'd need to incorporate a lot of compounds, Irish slang, an probably a litte bit of Gaelic. Oh! And as you saw above, make the two characters distinguishable from one another. The only time I realized the character change is when I saw their names. I felt like they had one personality. It's a lot for me to be able to say for three chapters, but I have a sense for these things. Otherwise, it was amazing! Keep writing,
          -Rachel

So I checked out your story! It was really good, but the ONE thing you need is to convince me that.... Uhhhhhh.... Whatshername is Irish. I may be Italian but I was born in America and in order for it to be believable you'd need to incorporate a lot of compounds, Irish slang, an probably a litte bit of Gaelic. Oh! And as you saw above, make the two characters distinguishable from one another. The only time I realized the character change is when I saw their names. I felt like they had one personality. It's a lot for me to be able to say for three chapters, but I have a sense for these things. Otherwise, it was amazing! Keep writing,
          -Rachel