Daphne

Hi! I came across your post in the forums, and I'm definitely interested. ^^
          
          Currently, my story is less than one hunderd reads, and I'd love advice.
          This is the link to the Prologue: http://www.wattpad.com/101469715-the-fortunate-unfortunates-prologue 
          It is only two pages, but because you only read one chapter, feel free to skip it. I'd like my critique to be on Chapter one, but I'm unsure if you'd be lost or not without the prologue.
          
          Short Blurb: An islands is created to be the new home for unfortunate adolescents who live in the apocalyptic setting of a town. Outside of this town is a renovated community and its citizens know nothing about the island. So when my, way to curious, protagonist, Melody, finds out about the proclaimed utopia, she discovers and ventures to find more secrets than she should have ever known.
          
          This is an Adventure story, so I hope that you will like it, if you get the chance to read it. :)
          
          I thank you in advance. And I'm glad to come across a Free Critic. It's appreciated.

Hello Daphne :D 
          
          I saw your ad on the forum, and I was wondering if you'd take some of your time to critique two chapters of my novel. 
          
          Story Title: 50 Days Before
          Numbers of chapter(s): 2 
          Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/25408677-fifty-days-before
          Summary: "I, Arianne Gonzales, a sixteen year old virgin who's too emotionally unstable to have a boyfriend, loves writing sappy love poems in a journal and uploading them online with a pen name which actually sounds and looks better than my real name."
          
          What will happen when a fun, cocky yet mysterious teenage boy named Grayson enters her life? Will he change the way she writes everything?
          
          Thanks in advance c: have a rad day.

Hi Daphne,
          
          My name is Corlaya - nice to meet you! I saw your ad on the critique classified forum, and if you'd like I'd love for you to critique a chapter of my novel.
          
          Story Title: Magnificent
          Chapter Number: 5
          Link: http://www.wattpad.com/94343561-magnificent-maggie-sooner-than-later
          Context: Basically at this point, the main character has done something horrible at a personal cost to her best friend, and is dealing with the guilt/aftermath of it.
          
          Thanks for the consideration!
          
          ~ Corlaya

Hey I saw your post. looking for a critique on my intro/first chapter.
          Intro summary. A lone man and a string of disappearances  in a remote valley in the midst of a blizzard.
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/17639394-bonafide-intentions

Hello, I was wondering if you would be interested in critiquing my story. (:
          http://www.wattpad.com/97872547-this-moment-from-beginning-to-end

Hi, I was wondering if you could give some feedback for my story 'Demons'?
          Link: http://www.wattpad.com/story/27165929-demons
          Mia William is falling apart. She’s ugly, fat and nobody fails to forget to tell her that. Her brother Alex doesn’t know how to help her and doesn’t know when she needs him. Her father is a violent alcoholic who finds pleasure in the sound of flesh on flesh. Her mother is weak, unable to support her when Mia needs it most. School is in no way a sanctuary, with students tormenting her and teachers letting it happen. When a drink too many finally drives her father to the murder of his wife and his own suicide, Mia can’t take anymore. She’s had enough. She’s a cracked china vase on the way to the cold marble floor, and there isn’t anything to catch her.
          I haven't written much, but hopefully I can finish this someday...

Hi! Saw your post about giving critiques and thought I'd request one. Only the first chapter is up at the moment, but I will probably update soon. Thanks!
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/30943492-something-wicked

http://www.wattpad.com/89957367-the-alcoholic-kittens-1-freak-out
          it's the first chapter. thank you, friend. <3

You're a nerd fighter!!? I love you already!

@nerdfighteriaa Hello! So, you posted on one of my discussions, but you never picked up your payment. Your payment is a comment on any story of your choice. Just comment below on wich story you want me to comment on.Thx!