noreenJung

Hi guys. :D 
          	I'm a new bee in writing a story. I was forced to write because it's one of my requirements in my major subject. In line with this i would like to ask you to please please spare a little time to read my short story and try to have a critics on my work. please please. I really need it so that i can correct it before the deadline. A lot thank you in advance. :*

noreenJung

Hi guys. :D 
          I'm a new bee in writing a story. I was forced to write because it's one of my requirements in my major subject. In line with this i would like to ask you to please please spare a little time to read my short story and try to have a critics on my work. please please. I really need it so that i can correct it before the deadline. A lot thank you in advance. :*