ourkid888

Good start, keep working on the details but dont get bogged down on one area dont forget a bit of comedy can push a story on to the next chapter and gives depth to the story

Hey thanks for fanning.  I haven't read your book yet (I'll have to add it to my read later library as I need to finish up a few others first) but I did scan it.  One tip - a lot of readers use the mobile app and you may have too much white-space which is annoying when reading on a phone.  If you haven't already, download the app and see how your book looks on it.   
          
          Welcome to Wattpad!!

Thanks for fanning and welcome to Wattpad! I'd love to know what you think of my work so please do comment. I'm going to check out your book. I hope you manage to get some writing done between shifts.