The idea of your story is very interesting but if I'm being honest...it has several big weaknesses. Before Nintega and Jordan's stories were taken down, you quoted and copied stuff from them with very few original elements in and one thing that annoys me the most is the references. References are good but you use them for almost every piece of dialogue or quote from what Y/N's in Jordan and Nintega's stories said and barely any original dialogue. I'm sorry, man, I'm pretty sure your a good person and your story is a good concept, it just could've been executed better. Not being mean, just giving criticism.
