queenleece

Your welcome. You are a great writer

My pleasure. Your entry was great

@queenleece 
            Thanks. Merry Christmas ❤️❤️

@AnnaDolly7 your welcome. Your entry was great.

I think my only problem with it was that when they got sucked into the video game, it was a bit sudden, a bit more explanation as what they felt could have been given before.

I must say i was a little disappointed that there was only one chapter in the book, because as a first it was pretty darn good. The thing that grabbed me was the relatability of the charters, who might i add were were well developed. I'm interested to see where this story goes. Keep it up

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Hey thee im so sorry that took me so long but i finally had some time to check out my read requests. So your book catching the tomboy. I think it has a nice plot going on. However, i think that the characters could be developed a bit more. For example Brandon, you gave him the role of the 'bad boy' but I'm not really seeing that play out. Also the structure needs some work. Im not sure if you planned to do this after but the grammar also needs adjustments in places. I must commend you though for the cover i really like the cover.

Most certainly. As soo. As i have time I'll give it a read. I'm all tied up with school work at the moment. 

Hey i just completed reading your story. I like the description and the plot along with the personality traits that you give to your characters. However, i think that though there are obstacles that the characters face there are too many times when you make it too easy or coincidental. For example finding the quiver of arrows, lightening that struck the tree which killed the wolf right before it killed her. Your descriptions are good but there are some points that can be improved. The thing i really like is your comparisons. They never fail to give a perfect visual.

Absolutely

I really like your story i really like how the characters are developed and how they deal with their interpersonal conflicts. I enjoyed it.

Hey I'm so sorry it took me so long. I'm checking out your book now and based on the first chapter i can tell its gonna b great