Hi, I’ve reviewed part of your story, and I can see strong potential in the concept and genre direction. However, there are a few technical areas, particularly pacing, paragraph spacing, and line clarity, that, if refined, could significantly strengthen the reading experience.
I specialize in breaking down setting structure, genre consistency, scene transitions, and identifying grammatical or structural errors that may disrupt flow.
If you'd like detailed, actionable feedback to polish your work, I’d be happy to collaborate.
