Kezia

@Mason_Skye Ohhh, thank you so much! This is an older draft (I've fixed a few things, but not much) so it probably won't be updated any more, sorry ^^' It depends on how things turn out. I'd love to publish it one day. But honestly, your comment made me gush! Thank you so much!
            
            PS. No, I didn't draw the cover, but I really should make a new one seeing as it's not my art (I edited it a little but still)
            
            PPS. Seeing as this is an old draft which I won't be publishing any more and I have a new draft in the works, I would be up to do some critique swaps if you're up for it!

Did you draw the cover? O_O it's AMAZING

@max81968 It does take a lot of dedication. I started writing a Marvel Loki fanfiction way back when I was only getting into it. Frankly, it was terrible, but it got me a lot of feedback and set me up for writing more important projects. Don't dive in too quickly, and save your earlier writing for yourself: that's what I did. Then again, different people write in different ways. That's just what I did.
            Even if you're just writing one-shots, at least you're writing. At times they can be easier, more enjoyable and even better than a full-fledged novel. 
            Whatever you do, make sure you enjoy it.
            And thank you for the feedback <3 It means a lot; it really does.

@max81968  Aw, thank you so much! I find that annoying too, and it can be misleading. You find a fanfic with an interesting premise and a couple million reads; of course you think it's going to be good. But no, it sounds like it's written by a three year old with as much knowledge about writing as a fetus.
            Anyway,  thanks for the follow! I'm really glad you're enjoying AoB so far. It means a lot to me :)

@KeziaOfAsgard What are you saying? The first one hooked me.D: But yes, this new one is better in terms of highlighting major plot points. It's more straightforward. The other one has charm (does that make sense?).
            
            Tbh, though, this is one story where the # of reads does not reflect its quality and promise. *Here be totally unsolicited advice! Proceed with caution!* It just needs more aggressive "marketing", like bookclubs+forums+more bookclubs+"rate your hook/first sentence/first paragraph games". It's what I do (yeah I basically live here now). Definitely not suggested for people like me who can't manage their time well.D: WP totally altered my daily schedule.Dx

@abby727ad Ooh, yes, pretty much spot on ;) I plan to introduce Erondur before chapter 10, if the story actually sticks to my plans for once.
            
            Glad you like the new blurb. The other one was a little too long and not quite... Hookish enough, if you know what I mean. It didn't quite draw readers in. I still like it (it was a tough decision whether or not to stick with that one or use the new one) but I think the new one is more effective. I'll do as you ask, though: I still have the old one saved.

@KeziaOfAsgard ACH!!! You changed the blurb!! "'It would be easy,' they said." W-what...happened?D: *gasp* What happened to the old blurb? So Avrart *will* use Erran (I still don't care for Leif) to get Farwyn to obey. Or maybe there are other friends? The...dark elves, perhaps? The city was built by elves, if I'm not mistaken. The stakes must be high for Farwyn. Oooh...
            
            Also, if Erondur is one of the King's guards, I wonder what he thinks about the public execution of J... J... one of the King's guards who died at the end of chapter 4. 
            
            The new blurb is good and more focused in terms of introducing your plot points and central characters, but please post the old blurb in a separate summary page under an A/N, please?:(