shimizuyukiko

chapter 2 of TITAN just got posted! hope you enjoy it! :D

XxRiah916Xx

Whoaaa!! You like anime too! That is soo cool! I see you haven't been on since July 1 and the conversation are from last year in September— where am I going with this?! XDD Anyway I wanted to say Hello and hope we could be great friends :)

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raine_drops

Hi! I've started posting some of my review on their respective sections. They're pretty long and there's a lot there, so I just wanted to make it clear that your writing is actually pretty good, and mostly I think you just need to edit and it will fix up a lot of my comments. You definitely have potential :) KEEP GOING!!!

shimizuyukiko

@raine_drops it's alright, I wanted to have a general idea about my writing style since it's hard to observe some things by myself :D I will definitely go over it again so I can correct any weird spelling/sentences/repeated sentences etc. I always tend to write a lot, I will have to see what I can do with it.
            It was a really helpful review since you had to cover so many pages :) thank you very much for taking your time with my work! *hugs*
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raine_drops

@shimizuyukiko I am not sure if I'm going to be able to do the last two chapters. I didn't realise your chapters were so long sorry, and it takes twice as long to read them while I'm taking notes. So my overall notes are: -good plot, you shouldn't have anyone trouble sustaining a novel. -Your writing grammar and structure etc is generally good, just need some editing. -Probably worth going back and re-writing those earlier sections because your style is much stronger the further you get into the story. -And then just make sure that each of your threads can be followed by a reader who doesn't have all the knowledge of the world you've created as you do. 
            This looks like it could really be a great story if you're willing to keep working with it. Best wishes, Raine
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shimizuyukiko

@raine_drops thank you very much :) I look forward to reading the comments.
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