soledad11995

@UnderMask  
          	I'm new to writing as well but I read like tons. so I kinda know what I'm talking about. I wanted to add that you should think about developing your characters more. For example there is more to the man than his physical looks. The way he carries himself and his facial expressions should be described by using more than a single word. I know it sounds like I'm contradicting myself but previously I meant that you were giving too much attention to small detail like the shape of the nose. unless it is vital for the story things like this should not be expanded on.Sorry for blabbing on...still reading. :)

soledad11995

@UnderMask  
          I'm new to writing as well but I read like tons. so I kinda know what I'm talking about. I wanted to add that you should think about developing your characters more. For example there is more to the man than his physical looks. The way he carries himself and his facial expressions should be described by using more than a single word. I know it sounds like I'm contradicting myself but previously I meant that you were giving too much attention to small detail like the shape of the nose. unless it is vital for the story things like this should not be expanded on.Sorry for blabbing on...still reading. :)

UnderMask

Thankss! I really needed the feedback! Im new to writing so I don't know what level of description I need. Sometimes I feel like im giving too much information and background story, but then sometimes I feel like im giving too little! Thanks and stay tune for chapter 3!