i like the idea of your story about taekook “your lips” however im kinda sad cuz there’s more “tag” chapters than actual story chapters. I believe that you have a great idea on the story but maybe working on it more deeply would make it better. There’s always a length in which readers will feel bored or feel like its going too fast. In this case i feel like you rushed every scene and chapter, so maybe being more descriptive would be helpful. I finished the book in an hour, but im not quite sure if i enjoyed such rushed scenes. Keep up the good work!!