taniyourstruly
Re-editing Persons With A Heart for the 3rd time, but I promise it's the last! Ally and I also might start a sequel(maybe)?
taniyourstruly
taniyourstruly
So to everyone whose confused, that was @MrFangirlGoddess who I am not talking to right now. (I hate you Noor)
peachypom
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crazyfangirl15
Hey!! im new to this.....can u plzzz check out my book "Paralyzed heart" ? i really need support and would love to hear from you
http://www.wattpad.com/story/23186687-paralyzed-heart
Do comment and tell me what you think
thanks!!!!
crazyfangirl15
@taniyourstruly thank you so much for the feedback and I will make sure I focus on my mistakes
taniyourstruly
Hello!
Your book seems very interesting, although it is a bit cliche. Please try to work on the grammar and punctuation, a few mistakes, here and there. (Ex. The story should be called "Paralyzed Heart" capitalize the P and the H.)
Other than that (and this is constructive criticism, please do not get offended), the style of writing seems very childish. I do not mean this in the way that children write with run-on sentences and stuff that don't even make sense, but when writing a story, please try not to include small talk or any of those words when in a discussion or talking to themselves.
The punctuation and capitalization though..Please focus more on that.
I really enjoyed it, and have voted for the Prologue as well as added it to my Library/Reading list. Please continue!
(I actually was thinking of writing a story with the exact same plot as you! The girl is scared of love..yadda blah.)
xx
Tani
WiggleMeHigh
http://www.wattpad.com/69418946-cardiac-chemistry Hey @taniyourstruly :) I read that you are a lover of romantic comedy. Please give my book a try and try to vote and comment me your point of view. It's just the description and. Anote yet. Hope you like it. Cardiac Chemistry...
taniyourstruly
OMG you made a ref to a Rubik's cube (I have been alive for a million years yet idk how to solve one...) #nolifenoshame please continue it! (Plus, try to make the story longer) Thanks for updating! xx Tani
WiggleMeHigh
I am so glad you liked it! I have updated the prologue, you can read it and suggest me to continue it or not :) Thanks! xx
AnnWrites
Hello Tani the hopeless romantic! ❀ ✿
Not sure if you're into funny novels such as Wimpy Kid books? ♥ ♡
Because if that sounds like something you would read, do take a look
http://www.wattpad.com/story/20184647-the-imperfect-kid
thank you v much ♥ ♡
taniyourstruly
Hey! I just started reading The ImPerfect Kid, and I love it so far! Keep up the good work! ♡
taniyourstruly
Lovinq my profile so far.
Some people's gotta learn to live in life.
Stupid damn rich people. [OHSHC :)]
So they can experience reality.
Read THE EMERALD GIFT!
MalevolentMelody
OMG xD I've watched all of Kaichou wa Maid-Sama (read most of the manga) Kimi Ni Todoke, Lovely Complex (long,long time ago), and Ouran Highschool Host Club (MY FAV)
taniyourstruly
Yess I just finished watching Kimi Ni Todoke yesterday and now i'm reading the manga. It's nice to know someone had the time to read my profile :)
maddie131
Thanks for adding Liquid Fireto your reading list :)
taniyourstruly
@khanze17 :O UR SISTER !?!??!