@EmaFarlin Well alright then. First thing that kinda hit me right off the bat is that I can almost feel the stereotype oozing out from the story. Not to be ddisrespectful or anything, but I feel that... Becca's (?) approach was almost the same cliche-troupe (back off female protagonist he's MINE.. AND I'M A COMPLETE B*TCH) did i get that right? I honestly would want to see how this story will develop, even though I'm not a huge romance fan, and see some character development since the characters kind of feel... Flat, yknow? But yea, that's my honest take on it. Plus your english is pretty good and it flows, even if it's a bit... Iffy at some parts.
