The Silent Swordsman is interesting. But the length of the sentences is giving a calmer vibe. Try breaking a few down into shorter sentences to help set a more exciting pace.
For example:
At noon, the titanic forces clashed around the hilly fields of Johnnaberg, with many bodies falling and fighting. The painful cries breaking through the roar of battle as many are slain.
Into:
At noon, the titanic forces clashed. Around the hilly fields of Johnnaberg, many bodies falling and fighting. The painful cries breaking through the roar of battle. Many are slain.
This kept the intention. The example only changed the pace. Shorter sentences creates a more intense feeling of action.
