@viotar Don't be too harsh on yourself. Practicing through reading and more writing is what develops good writers. I felt the same, till I achieved publishing my first novel in Spanish on Amazon, and now I'm translating it to English, so it's a new world for me, though I like it more... I'll see for your story as I am looking for feedback from readers and other writers. for that, I invite you to read my story and tell me your opinion. I'll do the same with you, what do you say?
Mine is Scars of Destiny...