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Round #1 Shiruku

Name: ShirukuTribe: Silk'wingPersonality: Optimistic and naturally a decent person (Dragon..?). She's an easy-going dragoness who's smile is infectious. However, she gets jealous easily with those who are more fortunate. She can also be selfish. She'e oblivious to body language. Second-guesses at wrong times and just zooms straight forward without thinking of the consequences at the wrong time. However, she's just a dragon, and a nice one too. Everyone has their flaws and hers are just stated here. She has a fear for abandonment and constantly seeks the spotlight so she is not forgotten.

Ohhhhhhh boy, this is so relatable it's almost painful. My greatest fear is that I will be forgotten. The fear of abandonment makes sense when you think about her backstory. Being jealous of others is realistic, and being jealous of those who have more friends and/or attention would make perfect sense fore her.

5 points 

Looks: White scales often covered in dirt splotches and moth-like wings. Her tail curls a bit slightly at the end. She is smaller then the average silk'wing.

Why is she covered in dirt splotches? Was she part of construction crew? Was it because of all her stealing? How tall is the average silkwing? I only ask because I'm curious. I love the moth like wings, I am a bit obsessed with moth based dragons. What does it mean by her tail curls a bit slightly at the end? Is it bent?

2 points

Gender: Female

Ok

Abilities: Good at singing.

Cool

Home: Formerly Bloodworm hive, currently Possibilty. However, she travels around the kingdoms often.

Ooof, Bloodworm hive. This hive seems the most likely to have a silkwing egg be abandoned. Possibility makes sense in the way that the dragons there would be use to strange dragons.

1 point

Backstory: Your average silk'wing that nobody really paid much attention to. She was abandoned as an egg, then left with neglectful parents. Left alone and ignored, she yearned for dragons to focus on her, so she became a troublemaker. Stealing scales and honey cakes was easy, then it became stealing prized possesions of hivewings. She always returned the important stuff, though.Soon, she had all the attention she wanted, even if it was filled with animosity and shouting. 

I would assume that she would get a lot of attention from the  underclass silkwing, the ones who aren't payed enough. Maybe even the Chrysalis, because she would have been seen as a hero to them, standing up to the hive wings.

2 points 

She grew tired of it, however. Would it be better to fade in the background again? She knew this hatred was not healthy for her, and the reminder came in the form of whispers of her being a stupid, useless thing that tried to be something in her mind. Then, a thought formed in her mind....what about leaving the hive and leaving for the distant kingdoms..? She knew they were real, since Clearsight existed. She didn't have any time to think. The hive's ceiling was ripped off by the violent storm.This was her chance. Sometimes she looks back on it and wonders what would've happened, had she not acted by impulse. She thrust out her wings, leaping into the air, and got whisked away into the stormy sky. When she awoke, a kind dragon had nursed her back to health and left her their house. She still wonders where they are now...

Wait, was she knocked out? By what? Why did this dragon give her their house, were they just about to move? Did the dragon live in possibility? If they did, then how did she get there? Was she found then brought to the dragon? Why did  the dragon leave?

She learned to sing from a friend and now sings at a tavern every thursday. She really likes this life. She's glad she was an impulsive dragon. 

What friend? Did she make one? Does she have a job, because singing once a week probably  doesn't make her a lot. Did dragons question her at all. Was it hard to adjust to the new lifestyle? I just wish I had more information about her landing in Pyrrhia. 

3 points

Other: Shiruku likes apples.

Delicious!

1 point 

Total points:14

All in all I really like this dragon oc. I find her personality relatable and realistic. She has a simple but easy to imagine design. I liked her backstory for the most part, I just wished I had some more information about what happened after she arrived in Pyrrhia. Who was her friend? How did she make a living? How did the community accept her? And how many apples did she eat? Other then that it  is a awesome oc! 

Congratulations! You have made it to Round #2!