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Title: [5/5]
It's unique and it suits the story well.
Cover: [2/5]
I think you should add creativity. The only face claim doesn't count as it suits the story. Try different fonts for the subtitles and the author's name.
Blurb: [4/10]
I only found a few errors, but darling, you need to add more words to the blurb. The length is too short. Give a little touch to the plot for readers to get a little bit of an idea of what is going to happen.
Grammar and vocabulary: [7/15]
Be careful when you're using triple periods and exclamation marks. Don't use them over the limits. We don't usually use triple periods after 'Nah or ah'. There should be an exclamation mark. There were some spelling mistakes.
Ex:-I guess he's going to nagg me.
It should be "I guess he's going to nag me."
Sense of the story: [5/10]
This plot may happen in the future after the world gives its focus more to Quantum physics theories, so I can't tell if it will not be real, but the reaction should be a bit explained. Think that y/n is you and then think about how you will react to those unexpected scenes. How we all react, then write the story.
Plot: [14/15]
I like the way you start it with the introduction + character aesthetics. The plot was amazingly good and it didn't make me feel bored and irritated even though there were lots of punctuation and spelling mistakes. If you describe more about their background, then it'll be perfect.
Dialogue: [6/10]
The dialogues were quite good, but besides your punctuation errors. They made it a bit weird.
Emotion: [5/10]
You should focus more on this topic too. I didn't feel every moment, but your explanation is not that bad.
Ex:-The way y/n reacts should be more revealed. We do so many things when we're in pure shock. Maybe our brain functions after a few seconds, but then we panic, our eyes widen, our hearts race and we scream.
Writing style: [7/15]
Ex:-The opening should be a bit more clear.
"Ugh" " I don't like waking up, never did I but college you know..."
Instead of writing the first part like that, you can write it like this;
"Ugh! I don't like waking up. Never did I, but college you know... " I yawned while stretching my arms, letting the sound of bones crackle.
Ex:-Don't use short word forms like, "gotta, kay, or ya 'in a story. You can use it only in text parts.
Enjoyment: [4/5]
After all, I love it and I'm waiting for an update soon. I voted for a few chapters as I really enjoyed your plot.
Total: [59/100]
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I hope my review helped you.
Happy writing!
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