The Review Court

We Are Soulmates || Reviewer: TheBeanFairy

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𝑅𝑒𝑣𝑖𝑒𝑤𝑒𝑟: Adella
𝑅𝑒𝑣𝑖𝑒𝑤 𝑃𝑎𝑐𝑘𝑎𝑔𝑒: Hekate
𝐵𝑜𝑜𝑘: We Are Soulmates
𝐴𝑢𝑡ℎ𝑜𝑟: siriusshinesregulus
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Trigger Warning: Discussion of Abuse

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Title - 5/5

The title is a perfect match for your book and, before I even read the book, I got an idea of what this story was about and how it would go. It evokes a mental image of a passionate, almost tragic, romance. There is no question of "are we soulmates?" It's simply stated, we are soulmates. So it gives the impression that, no matter what happens, Remus and Sirius will strive to be together.

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Blurb - 4/10

With the first quote we get from Sirius we immediately get a feeling for what happened between him and Remus, and how that affected him. Putting "Remus John Lupin" at the end of the quote, however, makes it sound more forced and less genuine than you were probably going for.

While it could be used to show who Sirius is speaking to, and that Sirius himself is saying the quote, I think the next paragraphs make that clear. If you want to keep the name, though, it would probably be best to shorten it just to "Remus" and put the name somewhere else in the quote, that way it would flow better in the sentence.

Using many contradictory statements in your blurb creates an interesting image in reader's heads and pulls them into the story, however I think the phrasing of your sentences could be constructed better. For example:

"Emotionless yet the one with most emotions."

Grammar wise it should be changed to:

"Emotionless, yet the one with the most emotions."

Even with the grammar fixes, that sentence sounds, for lack of a better word, off and a little hard to read. It would sound much better if it was just structured differently or reworded. For example, another way you could word it would be:

"He appeared emotionless, and yet he was the most emotional."

My example isn't the best worded sentence ever, but it's just an idea. You can reword the sentence however you want, or not at all if you don't want to make any changes. I would recommend that you reword your sentences throughout the first paragraph.

You also need a few slight fixes in grammar in that paragraph. Specifically you seem to be missing several commas, forgetting some words (such as the "the" in my first example), and adding in more words than is necessary. Specifically when you put "one" in the second sentence of the first paragraph twice, which makes it sound off.

The simplicity of the second paragraph is quite nice, however you could do without the "that's Sirius in one line." sentence because it takes away from the heaviness of the statement. The readers know, through context clues, that you're talking about Sirius, they don't need you to spell it out for them.