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01 • The Perfect Crime

THE PERFECT CRIME
Author • SherryRS
Reviewer • papersxpen

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TITLE • (5/5)

The title works absolutely great with the story. It gives the vibes of a crime book. The title makes sense with the context of the book, it is evident enough. It totally works with the genre, and it gives the feeling of a pretty intriguing story, to be honest.

COVER • (5/5)

I loved the cover! I so loved the blood spill, and the font makes it even prettier. The man with the hidden face also relates with the story, and the blurb so much. I find if simple and classy. It totally pulled me into reading further.

BLURB • (9.5/10)

Starting off with the quote was super hilarious, and it also attracts. All the rest was nice too.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT • (9/10)

The character's personalities were good enough, however, you could have used a better way. For example — moved around and come to the point with phrases and words rather straight away saying that, but I get it that at times, it's rather better to proceed in the latter mentioned way. I found that with Ethan. However, you revealed stuff gradually, which is good for the readers to see.

Also, I found there were some bland places where it fell off: the dialogues, for example. I couldn't find them interesting or normal, and the descriptive parts were a little mild too. You could improve them with better framing of sentences or adding them with suitable situations, making them relate.

For example—

"Good evening, sir." This was the last greeting he heard on his way.

"You too, Fred," Ethan greeted back while entering the house.

Ethan grey is one of the richest people in Portland. He is a doctor by profession. No matter how much money he had, he was willing to run a small private dispensary. He was a handsome and smart guy, but he always held cold expression. He was not someone who wanted to show off his emotions. It was the result of his loneliness over a long time.

This could have been—

"Good evening, sir." This was the last greeting he heard on his way to which he was great full enough.

"You too, Fred," Ethan greeted back while entering his massive house. His replies came off rather short and to the point. He wasn't the type to showcase his emotions, courtesy of his loneliness over the years.

Being one of the wealthiest people in Portland had provided him with some popularity, which he didn't ask for. The man was more than willing to run his private dispensary.

You could have also added some points elsewhere, because it might not be relevant enough. However, this isn't big of a deal. I was rather enjoying the story.

CREATIVITY/ORIGINALITY • (9/10)

I have always read new and original crime stories only, and this one was too. They all are somehow similar but the differences of characters and plotting and placing them makes them original.

VOCABULARY/GRAMMAR/SPELLING • (17/20)

I would actually recommend you to run your writing through places like Grammarly to correct your grammar and spelling, which I found a lot but only initially. You should always stick to a single tense too.

ENJOYMENT • (8/10)

It was actually a good story. I would like to to read further more.

OVERALL IMPRESSION • (17/20)

This story was pretty nicely written, and the plot was well thought out too. I would recommend it to other people. But you should work on grammar and spellings, and probably the style if you wish to.

TOTAL • (79/100)